We should understand that success is not easy nowadays. The world is changing with a rapid pace. Problems double, triple or more and their difficulty increases at exponential rate. To solve them, a lone man needs exceptional ability but only in a short time to defeat others. People hardly have such ability to cope with them. Hence, we have to cooperate with other people. From that, problems are solved by groups not individuals like before. We cannot try by ourselves because everyone finds their partners. Doing things alone in this modern world is just liked isolated ourselves. If we follow the old perspective, we definitely lose.
And why are communication and teamwork important for engineers, especially myself, an engineering student? Just like the abovementioned paragraph, engineers have to deal with more challenging, sometimes great problems. Computer engineering students like me and our friends may encounter problems such as: writing a program organizing database for a multinational company, of around thousands employees; designing circuit system for a huge architecture work; or assembling self intelligent machines. Obviously, we also have to compete with other groups, companies. To do so in a certain amount of time, I need to have good communication and teamwork skills. They enable me to express my opinions and understand my friends’ solutions easily and quickly. A team can do nothing good if there are conflicts between teammates. Conflicts are unavoidable. We cannot get rid of them, but we can reduce them.
Those are the reasons why communication and teamwork are of critical importance to computer engineers. Acquiring these good skills, future CEG students can resolve virtually all engineering problems.
7 comments:
Hi Thai Bao,
I like the examples you gave to relate teamwork and communication. I agree with you that we are likely to encounter problems if we design the circuit system for a huge architecture work. I am not exactly good in circuits and I highly doubt that I can accomplish such a task alone. Indeed, teamwork is crucial for completing such projects.
I agree that conflicts within a team are unavoidable, especially when everyone have a different opinion on the project. However, through effective communication and tolerance of the differences of each others, we can help to reduce the conflicts in a team. This may in turn make the team more efficient than before.
Your introduction is interesting. However, I felt that it can be summarized further. You can, for example, remove the explanation on how talent has been judged back in history.
I felt that the second paragraph can be shorten and combine with your introduction. This will in turn make your blog entry shorter, clear and more concise.
Li Hua
Hi Bao.
From reading your post, I get the impression that you are a very ambitious person! Indeed, the post reflects dealing with communication as a problem solving process, which strikes me as quite an interesting approach.
However, you could take note that absolute terms only serve to weaken your argument. Your second paragraph in particular can potentially raise some disagreement amongst readers. Perhaps you could use a more gentle tone while making firm assertions, while nudging the reader to accept your points. Suggestions are always better than factual statements when it comes to discussion. If you feel strongly about the issue, you could perhaps include "this is highly probable" or "this is commonly accepted to be the case".
That is all for now!
Johnson
Hi Thai Bao,
I enjoyed reading your post because of its unique perspective and solid content. I liked how you wrote about why communication and teamwork are important in relation to us, engineering students.
And yes, you are right in saying that teamwork is very important in today's corporate world. In fact, being a good team player has become one of the most desirable qualities today according to recent research on employment in MNCs.
But do take note of your grammar. For example, your first sentence “For a long time in history, the talent is judged based on their individual performance.” could have been written as “For a long time in history, talent was judged based on each individual’s performance.” We can’t use “their” because you have not introduced ‘them’ yet. And you have to use ‘was’ because you are talking about the past. If you avoid these small grammatical errors, there would be fewer disturbances to the reader and your message would get across much more effectively. After all, that’s what effective communication is all about, isn’t it? :)
Cheers,
Gulabi
Hi Thai Bao,
You have a great introduction when comparing the ancient time with the modern time, and going from individual-centered to teamwork-centered.
Your arguments is rather strong because it originated from the real life with the more and more requirements from the huge works,which cannot be solved by any person himself. However, I think it could be better if you add some examples from your own experience to support for your arguments.
The last part, in my opinion, the conflict in teamwork does not contribute much to your essay about the importance of teamwork. In addition, you should give some more place to emphasize the effects of good communication.
Overall, you did a good job in the first essay.
I strongly like your arguments. Keep going!
Best regards,
Tiep
@all: Very thanks for your comments. They greatly help me. I will try to use a more gentle tone and get rid of grammatical errors.
Hi Thai Bao,
I like the way you talked about the olden times and compared it with today. I agree with you
that today, in a rapidly changing world, it's much harder to achieve success as competitive people work in teams and are very efficient and effective. In the olden times, people were mostly judged by their individual talents but now, companies and sports teams also get recognition for their talents for working together well.
I appreciate that you have acknowledged the fact that conflicts are unavoidable. Since you have mentioned about conflicts, it would be good if you gave some examples. Your post also would have been more interesting to read if you talked more about your personal experiences in
your post. And like others have said, try to improve your grammatical skills. Looking forward to your next post!
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